How to lose a reader in one paragraph

It can be easy! Just start with a run-on sentence.

Here's Elisabeth Bumiller's into to her New York Times article about a report on the Afghanistan war.

"As President Obama prepares to release a review of American strategy in Afghanistan that will claim progress in the nine-year-old war there, two new classified intelligence reports offer a more negative assessment and say there is a limited chance of success unless Pakistan hunts down insurgents operating from havens on its Afghan border."

I understand her desire to cram as much information as possible, but I lost my train of thought about halfway through. Worse yet, she backloads the intro, saving the article's point for the end of the run-on.

I think it would have been more effective had Bumiller kicked off the intro by diving right into the report. She could still have juxtaposed it with President Obama's review and it would have been more organized and readable.